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Haïkus

Pimpanella

User since 2012
Posts: 288

12 May 2013

Who wants to play making haïkus with me ? Those short poems of three verses, the middle one is generaly longer than the two others, (I've sometimes read that the first must be of 5 feet, the second of 7, and the third of 5, but let's not be too rigid...) And please be indulgent, I've hardly made half a dozen in French, and this is my first in English, suggestions for improvement would be a plus !

bright and cold blue sky
greens and yellows of a child's drawing
spring is all around

Whose turn ?

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Pimpanella
User since 2012
Posts: 288
15 May 2013

Thank you for your descrete but genuine appreciation, I'm feeling encouraged ;)
Here is another one :

The century-old apple tree
watches us through the window
of the second floor
Thank you for your descrete but genuine appreciation, I'm feeling encouraged ;) Here is another one : The century-old apple tree watches us through the window of the second floor
Pimpanella
User since 2012
Posts: 288
12 May 2013

Who wants to play making haïkus with me ? Those short poems of three verses, the middle one is generaly longer than the two others, (I've sometimes read that the first must be of 5 feet, the second of 7, and the third of 5, but let's not be too rigid...) And please be indulgent, I've hardly made half a dozen in French, and this is my first in English, suggestions for improvement would be a plus !

bright and cold blue sky
greens and yellows of a child's drawing
spring is all around

Whose turn ?
Who wants to play making haïkus with me ? Those short poems of three verses, the middle one is generaly longer than the two others, (I've sometimes read that the first must be of 5 feet, the second of 7, and the third of 5, but let's not be too rigid...) And please be indulgent, I've hardly made half a dozen in French, and this is my first in English, suggestions for improvement would be a plus ! bright and cold blue sky greens and yellows of a child's drawing spring is all around Whose turn ?
AhQ ['a: kiu]
User since 2006
Posts: 2715
19 May 2013

Your brain isn't awash by anything but good ideas, Pimpanella. Would you tell me how you manage to start on a new line. Thanks in advance.
Your brain isn't awash by anything but good ideas, Pimpanella. Would you tell me how you manage to start on a new line. Thanks in advance.
AhQ ['a: kiu]
User since 2006
Posts: 2715
16 May 2013

What a damned writing system! Just deceiving! Sorry Pampanella
What a damned writing system! Just deceiving! Sorry Pampanella
AhQ ['a: kiu]
User since 2006
Posts: 2715
16 May 2013

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Oh Pampanella You're a real enigma Full of charisma
AhQ ['a: kiu]
User since 2006
Posts: 2715
16 May 2013

Oh Pampanella You're a real enigma Full of charisma
Oh Pampanella You're a real enigma Full of charisma
AhQ ['a: kiu]
User since 2006
Posts: 2715
16 May 2013

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<p style="margin-bottom: 0cm;">Oh, Pampanella <p style="margin-bottom: 0cm;">You 're a real enigma <p style="margin-bottom: 0cm;">Full of charisma
Thierry
User since 2012
Posts: 54
20 May 2013

Hi, I agree with you AhQ. Input some lines with a correct page setting on this forum is an achievement ! Have a nice day.
Hi, I agree with you AhQ. Input some lines with a correct page setting on this forum is an achievement ! Have a nice day.
Thierry
User since 2012
Posts: 54
20 May 2013

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Hi, To start a new line, use the keys "MAJ+Entrée". Have a nice day

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